Can someone edit the beginning of my essay please!!!!!!!!!!!!!!?

Wow! You are a fantastic writer for an eighth grader! Way to go on the excellent essay. As you can tell I enjoyed reading your essay very much so. You make tennis a big deal, because you say it's part of your everyday life. I really like that. I only found one error (and I am usually pretty good at finding errors so good job) and it's the although in the middle of the second paragraph. You should put a comma after it because there is a pause. You have a lot of commas so you may just want to double check if they are all needed. I am not good at correcting commas because I, myself, have problems with them too. Excellent job! I really liked it. If I were your teacher I would give you an "A." Double check the commas, the although, and you're good to go!